Monday, December 21, 2009

Kissing Day Blogfest scene


So, the challenge: Write a kissing scene or 'almost' kissing scene for Kissing Day Blogfest! Yeah, you got it. In honor of Mistle Toe.


To learn the official rules, check out A Writer Wannabe at: http://sherrindak.blogspot.com/


I'm not sure I want to put an 'almost' kiss scene. I need closure. Hmm...maybe I'll put one that has a little of both :-)


Here's an excerpt from my novel, It Had to Be You - American in England :-)

Eisley dabbed her eyes and fisted the handkerchief, her voice cloaked with tears.
“You make me feel things…” She pressed her fist over her heart and shook her head, new tears escaping down her cheeks and searing his self-control.

Wes stepped closer, trying his best to take it slow. He should have earned an award for self-control after all the waiting he’d done lately, but she was worth it.

Her lips fell into a pout, a plump, silky-looking pout. God, help me.
“I don’t want to be…vulnerable…or hurt again.”

The pain in her eyes twisted at his heart. Yes, he could take it slow.

He tilted her face up with a gentle touch of his hand. His words formed on a whisper. “Do you think I would hurt you?”

Her gaze lifted, emerald pools of sorrow, and she shook her head in defeat, breaths uneven.
“I’m sorry. You’re right. I’m acting like an idiot. It isn’t as though I should be afraid of you… returning any of these feelings, right? Crazy. You probably have women do this all the time, maybe not in a 15th century tower, but…” She offered an apologetic smile and drew her chin from his hand, tears still waiting in her eyes. “You make a great friend, but for you and me…”

Her laugh sounded a little too much like a sob. She patted his arm and tried to move past him. “It’s ridiculous. I shouldn’t even…I’m so sorry.”
He stopped her escape with a hand to her arm. “Why do you say that, Eisley?” His thumb swept a rebel tear from her cheek and dropped to rest on her shoulder. “I care about you in a very real way.”
She blinked and stepped back, just outside his reach. “As a friend, I know, and you’re a wonderful…”

“No, something much more dear.” He tightened the gap between them with another step.
She stumbled away, her eyes searching his, confused. “But I’m not interested in a weekend romance or even a month long fling. My heart can’t take it and my kids…”
“I’m not looking for that either.” Wes took another step closer.
“What? A few months of a long distance relationship?” She challenged with an angled brow, a hint of fire in those green depths.
She pushed his handkerchief back in his hands. “Maybe a year?” She shook her head and her next backward step placed her against the stone wall. “I’m not that kind of girl.”
His lips threatened to smile. He loved to watch her face come to life when she was angry.
Fascinating, really.

He closed the distance between them, tilting his head to hold her gaze. “I was thinking more like…um…‘til death do us part’.” Brilliant. So much for taking slow.

He rushed ahead. “I’m not asking for a commitment right now, only an awareness of my feelings and my sincere desire to win your heart.”

She firmed her chin and examined him through narrowed eyes. “This isn’t funny.”
It was his turn to feel surprised. “I’m quite serious, I assure you.”

She pressed her body against the wall, her expression moving through a myriad of emotions…doubt and hope vying for success. The poor dear was utterly confused, her lovely lips opening and closing without a word escaping.

He leaned closer, gentling his voice and waiting for her eyes to meet his. “Do you have any reason to doubt my sincerity, Eisley?”
His fingers smoothed a line down her arm and she shivered. Should he dare draw her into his arms now? Was she ready?

“You’ve introduced me to more life and hope this past week than I’ve felt in years. I don’t want to see my future without you in it.”
The wariness in her eyes wavered, so did her lips, and she snatched back the handkerchief. “Is that a line from a movie?”
He pushed a ginger tendril from her damp cheek and shook his head. “This isn’t pretend.”
She lifted both eyebrows in question.He grinned and glanced about the five hundred year old tower room. “Alright, fantastic…but not pretend.”

Hope dawned in her eyes, slow and steady, like a sunrise. She raised her palm to his cheek, warm, soft and trembling a bit. Mint lingered in the air and urged him forward.

Her voice breathed the words in a shaky whisper. “Okay, you are real. I had to check.” She sniffed, her smile growing. “Because I have a very good imagination.”
His lips sought her palm, and her quick intake of breath encouraged him to trail kisses down to her wrist. “I’d like to …um…. court you through letters…and email.”
“Court me?”
“Yes, allow our feelings to grow and develop through time and…” He grimaced. “Distance.”
Eisley swallowed. “And then? When you return to your real world and I return to mine? After you’ve won this single-mum’s heart?”
He captured her hand from his cheek, and braided his fingers through hers. “I plan to make her my bride…if she’ll have me?”
“You’re bride?” She whispered and then a giggle burst from her lips as she wiped tears from her face with the handkerchief. “Why?”
“Why?” His grin broadened. “Because you’re lovely, compassionate, tender-hearted, funny, joyful.” He tweaked a brow. “Did I say lovely?”
Her smile bloomed and drew his attention back to her lips.
She dropped her head, shaking it slowly from side to side. “Talk about crazy. This feels impossible, you know that?”
“God masters in the impossible, right?” He placed his hand on the wall above her head, leaning closer, her face tilting up to his.
“Have you been talking to my mom?”
Her gaze flickered to his lips and back, her shallow breath fanning his chin and sending a whiff of chocolate chip granola. Suddenly the room felt like a sauna.
He edged closer, lowering his hand to cup her cheek, his smile fading, as through hooded eyes he focused on her mouth. The mouth that had been a constant temptation since the day he met her.
Rosemary mingled with mint and chocolate chip in a wonderfully intoxicating way. Who was caught now?
She leaned her head back against the wall, eyes drifted closed and moist lips parted, slightly, in expectation of a kiss. Her breath blended with his, faster…closer.
“Wesley? Eisley? Are you there?”
His lips hovered near enough to feel her mouth stretch into a smile.
Lizzie’s voice drifted up through the stairwell just beyond the locked door.
“Eisley. Christopher Wesley.”
“Hmm, to be continued?” Eisley kinked a brow, her gaze a reflection of the embers in his chest.
He snuck a quick kiss, which only whetted his appetite for more, and growled. “Soon.”
She sighed and stepped toward the door. “It’d better be soon or I won’t believe it happened at all.”
“We can’t have that now, can we?” His arm swept about her waist and pulled her forward his lips covering her surprised ones, tasting their softness and warmth, with a hint of chocolate.
She released a satisfied moan and ran her hands up his arms to link about his neck, her passion matching his own. He drew her closer, lost in her scent and taste, a warmth shuddering through him with a sweet sense of home.
The door clanked from another shake. “Wesley. Eisley.”

Sunday, December 20, 2009

Characterization Through the Christmas Story - Passion


Another echoing theme, from the authors who gave tips on characterization during the month of November, was a characters essence….


His power
Her strength
His desire
Her motivation
What drives him to achieve his goal?
What keeps her awake at night?


I’m going to sum it up as the Passion that plunges your character forward: The core of his strength which forces him to the final page.


All characters must have this passion or motivation, or they’re just names on paper and the story is over. His desire can be the girl. Her motivation can be her family.

In The Christmas Story, Mary is an integral character…our heroine. She has a backstory, a history built on centuries of stories, and she is confronted with a choice. Not an easy choice, either.

She’s going to have a baby, but not by her fiancĂ©.
She’s going to have a baby, and she hasn’t even ‘known’ a man.
She’s been a good little girl, followed the laws, honored her parents….and now….
People might shun her
Joseph probably won’t believe her
There’s a possibility she could be killed
What will her parents say?


But how does Mary respond?


She seemed to understand the beauty of the ‘call”, as if each breath of her life had built her up for this moment.


Into this insignificant little town in Galilee, to this poor teenage girl, God sent an angel…a message…a miracle.

Her passion for God’s glory and her strength to do what will honor Him, shines through in her beautiful song known as the Magnificat, but even before the song Mary does something all Christians must learn to do at some point.

After the angel shares the news of what God’s going to do in her life, here is Mary’s reply. “I am the Lord’s servant…May it be to me as you have said.”
Full submission to the will of God.


Her motivation, her passion, her strength was found in the essence of her faith. God.
She trusted him with her life, her future, other peoples’ responses, Joseph’s reaction…the precarious future. Her motivation to make it to the next scene of her life, was her hope in God and reliance on his faithfulness. Her passion was found in her ready humility and instant gratitude.


Whew, what a character. And she’s much more widely known than Scarlett O’Hara or Elizabeth Bennett.

Bible tip for the Day:

Luke 1:37 – “For nothing is impossible with God.”

As aspiring writers, we wish to see our books in print. The goal may feel unattainable. But the One who inspires Your soul, will give you the talents, opportunities, and strength to persevere when you keep your passion in Him.
Writing Quote for the Day:
“First, find what your character wants…and then follow him.”
- Ray Bradbury

Sunday, December 13, 2009


My kids are a pretty good bunch. Of course, they show their need for a Savior just like everybody else on planet Earth, but for the most part they get along pretty well.....except during certain times of the year.


At the present time, they are behaving like the seagulls off of Finding Nemo. Four little voices (my youngest doesn't talk yet) echo through the house calling "mine, mine, mine'.


Every seasonal commercial entices coveting and draws my children out of their somewhat contentedness into fits of 'I need, I need" or "mine, mine, mine".


Instead of singing "Tis the season to be jolly", I feel like screaming "Tis the season to be greedy?" Hmmm, not quite what I'm praying for....


As an example of this, and very fitting for the season, my daughter brought home a gingerbread house she'd created at school complete with every sugar coated candy imaginable....her very own gingerbread house (my precious). After supper we told her she could have a few pieces of it and she voluntarily offered some to her brothers.


Now, you might be thinking, 'how sweet' (no pun intended), but this is the way she offered it.


"Ben, you can have this one...but you have to ask nicely. Aaron, you can't have any of the chocolate, but you can have this."


After some redirection, she offered in a much nicer way, so Aaron responded just as a thankful child ought to...


"Hey, you gave Ben more than you gave me. I don't want the little one, I want the big one."


For the next ten minutes (maybe less, maybe more), I had a discussion with them about a 'thankful heart' and a 'giving heart'. They seemed to get the idea, for at least the rest of the evening.


Christmas is often called 'a time for giving'. Why? Because the most tremendous example of giving took place in Bethlehem over 2,000 years ago. God gave His one and only Son, whom he loved, to the cruel world and wrapped him up in flesh. His gift tag might have read:


To: A sinful world

From: Your Heavenly Father


This type of giving can't be matched, but it ought to be inspiring. It should spurn us into acts of giving and not only money, but the greatest gift we have....love.


Romans 13 (which comes right after the chapter where we are encouraged to love everyone, even our enemies), reminds us in verses 8:


"Let no debt remain outstanding except the continuing debt to love one another for he who loves his fellowmen has fulfilled the law"


But even more than just keeping the law, we should do it out of a 'thankful heart' because of our greatest gift from Heaven. You want your kids to be thankful for what they receive at Christmas and any other time of year, right? We should show even more gratitude as God's kids, because of the precious gift he sent to us on that night long ago in Bethlehem.


We have unwrapped a love so great, profound, lovely, and secure that nothing else could ever outshine it. We need nothing more under our Christmas trees than this ultimate gift.May we be inspired to give His love to the world around us and may we revel in gratitude for gift beyond our wildest dreams.

Saturday, December 12, 2009

Characterization Through the Christmas Story - Backstory


Throughout the month of November, I’ve featured authors who answered two questions:

Who are your favorite characters you’ve ever written?
What is the behind-the-scenes story of those characters?

Over the next few days and in preparation for some new answers from guest-authors, I’m going to take those answers and sum them up by looking at The Christmas story from the Bible.

The experiences of a character or the circumstances of an event that occur before the action or narrative of a literary, cinematic, or dramatic work: At rehearsal, the actors developed backstories for their characters.
A prequel.


All characters in any given book have a history, or events that occurred in their lives before page one. Having a thorough knowledge of the character’s backstory helps authors create a more three-dimensional, therefore believable, character. Their pasts guide their emotional responses, their decisions, and have infinite value on their responses to change as the story progresses.
So, what is the backstory of The Christmas Story?

Well, we have to wander back thousands of years where a sneaky snake met a woman in a garden and twisted God’s words into a scheme that led to the fall of humankind. But even then, in Genesis chapt 3, God promises a Rescuer.

In verse 15, God tells the serpent,
And I will put enmity
between you and the woman,
and between your offspring and hers;
he will crush your head,
and you will strike his heel.”

As each book of the Bible progresses, we read story after story of man’s fall and God’s rescue, always pointing to a great Rescuer – one who would return us to our ‘rightness’ with God; one who would annihilate our sins; one who would perfectly obey where Adam failed.

As any young Jewess, Mary heard these stories her entire life and along with her fellow Jews, looked forward to the day when Messiah would set the chaos back into order.

The buildup to this ‘Coming King’ had been foretold for centuries, whispered and announced generation to generation, from Adam to this young woman and her betrothed. He would be a reigning king, a warrior, a suffering servant, the lamb, the lion – Who will be able to stand up to his coming?

Into this story, comes our heroine – Mary, a young woman of virtue, and this backstory shapes the person she is and the decisions she will make. Into this story steps one of our heroes, Joseph, a man of honor, both from the line of King David and both integral pieces of God’s story about The Rescuer.

Bible tip for the day:
For we know that all things work together for the good of those who love him, who have been called according to His purpose.” – Romans 8:28

God uses all of our backstories for His ultimate glory. If we are His, he takes our mistakes and triumphs to mold us more and more into His image.

Writing Quote for the day:

“The best way to send information is to wrap it up in a person.” (pretty appropriate for Christmas – don’t you think )




Robert Oppenheimer

Tuesday, December 1, 2009

The 5 Ps of Writing With Purpose - P.A.L.S

The world of writing can be a lonely place...er...but for the imaginary friends in one's head, but a good way to stay on the 'write' path without loosing your mind is to have the best critique group around. P.A.L.S.
or
Prayerful. Allies. Loving. Sincere.

What do I mean by this? People

but not just any people, people who are in the trenches with you. The best types of Pals to help you through the waiting game and hardwork of writing meet some pretty fundamental guidelines.

P - Prayerful

Finding people who not only share your passion for writing, but your purpose in Christ, is a jewel among coal; and friends who are willing to pray for you and with you give encouragement of a spiritual nature.

My two closest PALS in my circle of friends are not writers - but readers. They may not know all about protagonists and a three-act structure, but they know about prayer. When my positive perspective fails, my patience is running thin, and I don't have the best words to pray, they'll be my encouragers through their own prayers.

Ephesians 3: 16-18 says, "I pray that out of his glorious riches he may strengthen you with power through his Spirit in your inner being, so that Christ may dwell in your hearts through faith. And I pray that you, being rooted and established in love, may have power, together with all the saints, to grasp how wide and long and high and deep is the love of Christ,"

and

2 Thess 1:11-12
"we constantly pray for you, that our God may count you worthy of his calling, and that by his power he may fulfill every good purpose of yours and every act prompted by your faith. We pray this so that the name of our Lord Jesus may be glorified in you, and you in him, according to the grace of our God and the Lord Jesus Christ"

A - Allies

These are people who believe in you and your talents. Who see your potential. Paracletes, who run beside you in the race and urge you to complete it. Surrounding oneself with a crew like this, makes the disappointment of rejection or postponements of a dream, more bearable.

Romans 1:11-12 has something good to say about this:
"I long to see you so that I may impart to you some spiritual gift to make you strong - that is, that you and I may be mutually encouraged by each other's faith."



This can mean fellow writers, highschool buddies, fellow moms, football teammates...whoever, because their purpose is to fight along side you to see you reach your goals.



L - Loving


Love binds people together - even the most unlikely of characters, but it is also the rock that weathers the storms of life. Surrounding ourselves with people who love us and remind us of their love for us, no matter what happens, keeps our priorities in perspectives. Sometimes, it's the extra push we need to resubmit our manuscript or the word of encouragement heard to sit down and finish the wordcout, or the hopeful voice which says, "it's okay, you'll get more done tomorrow." They exemplify God's love - God's hands and feet in our lives.

2 Corinthians 2:4: "For I wrote you out of great distress and anguish of heart and with many tears, not to grieve you but to let you know the depth of my love for you."

S - Sincere



Even if it's hard to hear, the most faithful of friends will tell you the truth, but the truth of a friend is more bearable because of the bond created from the P.A. & L. If you are not open to hearing the truth about your manuscript from a trusted pal, how much more will the sting of rejection be from a complete stranger. Friends help us learn to be teachable and as writers, we HAVE to be. It's a constant learning process.



Because we know our friends love us, are on our side, and share a deepset faith with us, we can take their suggestions and learn from them. Does that mean they're always right? No. But it does mean that most of the time, their hearts are in the right place :-)



Ephesians 4:15-16

"Instead, speaking the truth in love, we will in all things grow up into him who is the Head, that is, Christ. 16From him the whole body, joined and held together by every supporting ligament, grows and builds itself up in love, as each part does its work."


God sends encouragers our way, people who help us to persevere, who wait with us through the tough times, who pray and praise with us and give us the positive perspective we need, when we’re only seeing the glass as half-empty.

Our Pals can be fellow writers, family, friends, or even a judge from a contest – but they’re out there, and they are all part of God’s big design to keep us on the write path.


God is good, faithful, and ever so gracious to give us the tools – and the people- we need to finish the story He’s written for our lives. From page one, He’s planned the chapters, and though conflict is rife, He’ll see us to our happy ending.

Monday, November 30, 2009

Characterization in The Christmas Story


Check out my website for some character creation tips taken from The Christmas Story from the Bible.


Using tips accumulated over the past month's guests, I'm summarizing those characterization hints through a look at Mary, Joseph, and the events around the birth of Christ.


Next week, guest authors give us examples of their favorite 'birth of faith' scenes they've ever written. Don't forget to stop by and check it out!



Sunday, November 29, 2009

The Unfinished Gift by Dan Walsh


Can a gift from the past mend a broken heart?

Ian Collins is an old man without his son. Patrick Collins is a young boy without his father. On his Christmas list are only three items. He wants the army to find his father. He wants to leave his grandfather's house. And he wants the dusty wooden soldier in Grandfather's attic--the one he is forbidden to touch.

Set at Christmastime in 1943, The Unfinished Gift is the engaging story of a family in need of forgiveness. With simple grace, it reminds us of the small things that affect powerful change in our hearts--a young boy's prayers, a shoe box of love letters, and even a half-carved soldier, long forgotten. This nostalgic story of reconciliation will touch your heart.

Available at your favorite bookseller from Revell, a division of Baker Publishing Group.




Get ready for a beautifully crafted story of hope, second chances, and forgiveness. I almost cried three times in the first two chapters. Dan Walsh takes the reader on a story about an embittered old man who has lost sight of true love and of a lonely seven-year old boy who is trying to find hope in the middle of his sorrow. Both characters a beautifully crafted and draw you into the struggles within each of their hearts to try and make sense of hurt in their lives.


The tenderness and transformation of Ian Collins is beautiful, but it takes hitting rock bottom to bring him to the end of himself and his own prejudices. As with any of us, the only true healing and hope comes from the truth of God's love, and what a better example than in the story of Christmas. God gave us a 'finished' gift in sending his son to the world to rescue those who were lost, lonely, embittered, and looking for hope.





A beautiful story.





To read an excerpt of The Unfinished Gift follow the link below:


http://www.revellbooks.com/Media/MediaManager/Excerpt_9780800719241.pdf